I mentioned Invincible as a super hero book worth checking out for any writer starting a new super hero series. Another trade worth picking up is the first volume of Jay Faeber's Dynamo 5. Every issue starts off with action and draws in the reader immediately.
Chris, thanks for sharing your script. Start this bad boy with our heroine kicking one of the soccer stars in the balls, or battling the whole group of them. A caption something like..."I'm kicking the ass of the entire British National Soccer Team. I'm about to be the most hated woman in London." Or something like that.
Start with action, back up with character, wax and repeat. There's good stuff here.