I really liked what was happening with the pace here. I'm guessing we're going to end up with Talia investigating the murder on page one, right? That's all good. And we're getting Talia's background in a reasonably mysterious way that interested me. Steven pulled you up on that first sequence with Dag and the Positi. My suggestion would be to include some drunken, flirty dialogue, maybe even from the get-go in the establishing shot. Maybe even cut that last panel, or make it so they've dissapeared down an alley, presumably to do something lude, and Dag's dialogue is coming out in a kind of "oh no, don't do that" kind of way. There would perhaps be an assumption from the reader that he was ravashing her in the wrong orafice or something equally depraved, and of course later on we find out she's a she-bitch from hell who's killed him. You can hint at what you already had by having a bloodcurdling scream and a flash of energy coming out of the alley or whatever seedy love nest they've ended up in. Just my take on it. Hell, I'm a fan of mystery, and if you're Talia character is fulfilling the role of inquisitor, it may be best to play it from that angle, rather than making us privy to too much that she doesn't know.