Wow, that was a lot less painful than I expected. That was my first ever attempt at a comic script, so I thought it would be way worse.
I agree with pretty much everything you said there, so thank you for taking the time to go through it.
I'm glad you enjoyed it, especialy later in the story where it all gets a bit bogged down in exposition.
Thank you again for taking the time to do this, it has been very useful indeed.