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Thread: Your Own Private Wormhole, Part 1: All the time in the world

  1. Rain Guest

    Seconds, (cheap) attempt two:

    Panel 1: Quintessential shot of a NASA space shuttle pointed towards the sky for take-off. Smoke is billowing from its exhaust.

    CAPTION: ...1...

    Panel 2. Same shot. More smoke. Just a few hints of flames are also visible from the bottom of the rocket.

    2 CAPTION: ...Blastoff!



  2. LeeNordling Guest

    Quote Originally Posted by Rain View Post
    Seconds, (cheap) attempt two:

    Panel 1: Quintessential shot of a NASA space shuttle pointed towards the sky for take-off. Smoke is billowing from its exhaust.

    CAPTION: ...1...

    Panel 2. Same shot. More smoke. Just a few hints of flames are also visible from the bottom of the rocket.

    2 CAPTION: ...Blastoff!
    Even "...3...2...1..." in one panel, then "...blastoff!" in the next panel, would work for...

    1 SECOND.

    We're measuring the time between the panels, and not necessarily including the time IN panels, though if these two captions were in one panel, then the time inside the panel would be four seconds.

    You get a PASS on this one, Rain.

    Nice recovery.

    Now, others out there may think you've got this, but note that Rain tripped on his fourth try, after getting successfully through the first three, so clearly there's some flabby muscles getting exercised here.

    --Lee



  3. danialworks Guest

    Lemme try the seconds one again... same kind of scenerio...

    Panel 1. It's a wide panel-- Fastman is a blur of multiple images racing uphill. Masked Villain--looking disgustingly pleased with himself-- is deep in the background, holding up a large LCD showing us a very big '1001...' Near the top of the hill, the fuse on an old-fashioned bomb is nearly spent...!

    SFX (MASKED VILLAIN): HAHAHAHAHAHA!!

    SFX:SSIIIIZZZZZZZZZZZZZZLLLLLLLLLL!!

    Panel 2. A trail of dust left by our hero. Masked villain now just looks disgusted, even though the massive LCD he's holding now reads '0000.' Our blurred, multiple images of Fastman now end with him having just dived for the bomb, and caught the end of the fuse between two outstretched fingers.

    FASTMAN: Ouch!

    SFX: SStttt...!

    SFX (MASKED VILLAIN): NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!



  4. danialworks Guest

    Hours, now.

    Panel 1. Blake Action is sitting propped up against an alley wall, clutching at a fresh wound in his side. His face tells us he's just failed in an attempt to get up. Beside him, a pool of water shows us the reflection of a clock tower-- we can't quite see the time.

    SFX: DONNNNNNG!! DONNNNGGGG!!

    Panel 2. Much the same as panel 1, except our guy Blake is now barely conscious, and his blood is mixed into the water to obscure the reflected face of the clock tower that much more.

    SFX: DONNGGG!! DONNNNNNG!!!! DONNNNNNNGGG!!! DONNNNNNG!!!



  5. danialworks Guest

    Eons.

    Panel 1. God is a powerful figure half hidden in an ocean of clouds, looking down on single-celled organisms struggling to survive in a primordial ocean.

    Panel 2. God is just as impressive, his head haloed by thunderstorms, and the fluffy white clouds beneath him form the words, "2 eons later, and nothing has changed!!" Just off Coney Island, college kids are playing water volleyball in the Atlantic.



  6. LeeNordling Guest

    Quote Originally Posted by danialworks View Post
    Lemme try the seconds one again... same kind of scenerio...

    Panel 1. It's a wide panel-- Fastman is a blur of multiple images racing uphill. Masked Villain--looking disgustingly pleased with himself-- is deep in the background, holding up a large LCD showing us a very big '1001...' Near the top of the hill, the fuse on an old-fashioned bomb is nearly spent...!

    SFX (MASKED VILLAIN): HAHAHAHAHAHA!!

    SFX:SSIIIIZZZZZZZZZZZZZZLLLLLLLLLL!!

    Panel 2. A trail of dust left by our hero. Masked villain now just looks disgusted, even though the massive LCD he's holding now reads '0000.' Our blurred, multiple images of Fastman now end with him having just dived for the bomb, and caught the end of the fuse between two outstretched fingers.

    FASTMAN: Ouch!

    SFX: SStttt...!

    SFX (MASKED VILLAIN): NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!
    How much time passed?

    1001 to 0000.

    How much time is that?

    I don't know, so this gets a REVISE FOR CLARITY.

    I think you should work for a simple solution before complicating it to the point of confusion.

    ---Lee



  7. LeeNordling Guest

    Quote Originally Posted by danialworks View Post
    Hours, now.

    Panel 1. Blake Action is sitting propped up against an alley wall, clutching at a fresh wound in his side. His face tells us he's just failed in an attempt to get up. Beside him, a pool of water shows us the reflection of a clock tower-- we can't quite see the time.

    SFX: DONNNNNNG!! DONNNNGGGG!!

    Panel 2. Much the same as panel 1, except our guy Blake is now barely conscious, and his blood is mixed into the water to obscure the reflected face of the clock tower that much more.

    SFX: DONNGGG!! DONNNNNNG!!!! DONNNNNNNGGG!!! DONNNNNNG!!!
    Two hours...or 120 minutes, since minutes was the assignment, but either way, good one. PASS.

    --Lee



  8. LeeNordling Guest

    Quote Originally Posted by danialworks View Post
    Eons.

    Panel 1. God is a powerful figure half hidden in an ocean of clouds, looking down on single-celled organisms struggling to survive in a primordial ocean.

    Panel 2. God is just as impressive, his head haloed by thunderstorms, and the fluffy white clouds beneath him form the words, "2 eons later, and nothing has changed!!" Just off Coney Island, college kids are playing water volleyball in the Atlantic.
    Two eons.

    Good one.

    PASS.

    --Lee



  9. LeeNordling Guest

    Day 3.

    We're still on the first exercise, and we have mixed results.

    Nobody has yet walked in and offered three passing examples first time out of the gate.

    Some revision work is getting by, though, and yay to the guys doing their work.

    This isn't the only exercise we have, so I'd like to see more people working with this so that it starts to become second-nature.

    For those of you who got there on your revisions, I ask you to try again with a new series of ideas.

    Until you can do this without breaking a sweat, it's far harder than it should be.

    At its core, like what we covered in the Time-Master series, this involves learning to write with intention, and nobody will be able to do this by just reading; you'll have to do it by doing it.

    Break time's over.

    --Lee

    PS. For those you who think this is simple, please note that nobody passed first time through, which means the most confident didn't have it down pat, and needed to make adjustments to their default process in order to tackle this assignment. So, if you're here to learn, this is the only time you're going to have with me to learn this. I'm just saying....
    Last edited by LeeNordling; Thursday, March 18, 2010 at 07:09 PM.



  10. Rain Guest

    Quote Originally Posted by LeeNordling View Post
    I ask you to try again with a new series of ideas.
    SECONDS

    Panel 1: From a point of view near the top of the three point arch, we see a University of Kentucky basketball player in the paint. He has thrown up a hook shot over a Tennessee defender. The ball is just a couple feet from the shooter's fingertips, on its way to the basket. A shot clock above the backboard reads: 1.

    Panel 2: Tight shot of the ball coming up short and clanking the front of the rim.

    SFX (clock buzzer): BBBrrrrrMMM!

    (Yep, you can guess where I'd rather be than work today and tomorrow.)

    YEARS

    Panel 1: President George Bush Sr. stands in the house chambers of the Capitol Building, before a joint session of Congress.

    CAP: Sept. 11, 1990

    BUSH: The crisis in the Persian Gulf, as grave as it is, also offers a rare opportunity to move toward an historic period of cooperation. Out of these troubled times, our fifth objective—a new world order—can emerge: A new era—freer from the threat of terror...

    Panel 2: Hundreds of terrified people run from a gigantic cloud of dust and debris that billows up the street behind them, blocking out the sun.

    CAP: Downtown New York.

    MILLENIA

    Panel 1: A female park ranger stands in a cave before a group of young students. She's motioning over her shoulder to the wall behind her, where a crude red outline depicts galloping deer.

    Ranger: Now children, if you look here you'll find some of the earliest artistic works attributed to man. According to radiocarbon dating, these animals were drawn some 32,000 years ago!

    Panel 2: A dirty index finger is extended, with red pigment matted to its point. The finger is pressing against a stone wall, where it has completed half of the deer depicted in panel one.



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